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authorbrian m. carlson <sandals@crustytoothpaste.net>2012-05-19 17:05:50 +0000
committerbrian m. carlson <sandals@crustytoothpaste.net>2012-05-19 17:05:50 +0000
commit71172c28e2069be0140b69ef6e2e57cfd2159d4d (patch)
treec0e4af924c98b7e26eb80963be38fd28e7b12cf5 /aoif
parent1f9c47db92ad37449c81b90120c2fa5cf59241b9 (diff)
luminous-veil: try a revision of the first stanza.
Signed-off-by: brian m. carlson <sandals@crustytoothpaste.net>
Diffstat (limited to 'aoif')
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diff --git a/aoif/luminous-veil.dbx b/aoif/luminous-veil.dbx
index 5c002ea..e08405b 100644
--- a/aoif/luminous-veil.dbx
+++ b/aoif/luminous-veil.dbx
@@ -35,11 +35,12 @@
</rdf:Description>
</rdf:RDF>
</info>
- <literallayout xml:space="preserve" class="normal">
-I saw you there, waiting for me on my way home
-from class. We went to Denny's, the conversation
-slow and easy like always; the next morning
-all I saw was your text: <quote>sorry</quote>.
+ <literallayout xml:space="preserve" class="normal">I saw you there, waiting
+for me on my way home from class.
+We went to Denny's, the conversation
+slow and easy like always, cracked jokes
+like eggs; the next morning all I saw
+was your text: <quote>sorry</quote>.
I only wish that we had gone to Toronto
to see the viaduct—Elysian?—Prince Edward,